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Snugaroo , Monday, 9th of August 2010 05:47:29 AM



Ideas of an Idea

Part One: The Waiting
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/>here l am, wondering about my existence. like the days before. how many 
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days have passed? l do not know for l can not remember how everything 
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started. it feels like forever. perhaps forever has passed? why. that 
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word. that word seems to be the only useful word here. why is the land 
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white? where did the black marks came from? and what was that metal tower 
doing over there? what is its purpose? what is MY purpose? and where did 
everything come from?what created it?

Part Two:Theories/>
l remember. l remember. l think l remember. the day when the 
tower was created. how it struck the lands. how the large gaping hole 
around it was produced. and beyond that hole was another thing. a brown 
compound. no. when l was close enough l learned that it was solid. it 
seems to be similar to the outer grounds. the land beyond the lands. as 
time passed before me every single moment my mind struggles to chase 
forgotten thoughts. memories. and sometimes l remember. and sometimes it 
slipped frommy grasp again. why.

Part Three: An Idea
/>l think. l think. l think all the time. for that is the only useful 
thing to do. what created me. what created everything. what CREATED. 
sometimes l look out at the sky. l saw parts of my memoriesrunning around. 
those little brats. enjoying they're freedom. why can not l do that? why 
can not l run away? just like my lost memories. my thoughts. thats okay. 
for l will catch them later.

Part Four:Revelations
/>l caught one. l caught one of my memories. l can not believe it. the 
feeling of self discovery. it feels like something is being attached to 
me. the feeling. l like that feeling. it makes me feel good and powerful. 
l remember. l remember. the tower used to be taller. l remember how it 
collapsed. how its blood poured down the lands. and the tower locked the 
lands. it prevented it from moving. pinning it down to the mysterious 
brown solid. yes. now l remember. the black streaks. they came from the 
tower. the tower made the lands dirty. and what about me? where did l come 
from? where did the tower come from? these memories. they are good. l need 
more.

Part Five: The Truth, Perhaps?

l caught a 
bunch of memories now. after struggling for what seems like forever, l 
hope these memories are worth it. now...i await my pleasant discovery. />a person. l see someone. what is he doing? the tower..i see the tower. 
when it was in its glorious form! in..it was.. it was in his hands. what 
was he doing with the tower. why was it small? small enough so that someoe 
could hold it. more questions came up as they get answered. maybe they will 
never stop? maybe my quest foris useless for l will never find any ? no. l 
must not ponder about the others. l must concentrate on this. a cannot 
afford to lose my memories again. i've gone to far...

Part 6: 
A Purpose

as l delve deeper into the depths of my 
mind..floating in the black void in my mind. the black void was there each 
time l think of something. there l gain an audience with my memories, 
viewing what they have in store. the person l saw just now. he seems 
frustrated. l can feel it. l understand him. i, too, was frustrated. but 
not anymore, for l have my . that person..what was he doing? why was the 
tower in his hands? how did it get small. maybe the tower was not small at 
all? maybe the person was the one who was big. as new questions came up as 
l answer them, newcome up as im answering them. l see.. it is balanced. 
the person..seemed unbalanced.. what was he doing? drawing? drawing...on a 
piece of paper.. a white sheet of paper. perhaps that was the land. 
and..who is on the piece of paper?

as l concentrated harder and 
harder....

i learned that the person on the paper was me. />
was the person drawing me? was that how l was created? am i...a 
figment of his imagination? was l in HIS black void? am l in it right now? 
so many ...so many questions...they just...come up. ideas an theories 
pouring out of my mind. the mind. is a blessing and a curse. l need to use 
it to escape it. why was everything balanced?

Part Seven: Flaws 
of Symmetry

the person was trying to create. a burden that all 
artists take. the person was an artist. he was failing. his desired 
masterpiece was impossible to create. his anger got the better of him. the 
artist struck his desk with the tower. no..not a tower. an instrument that 
was used to create. a pen. fueled with its ink, and fused with an artists 
imagination, it could create anything. by the powerful minds of artists. 
struggling to produce, to CREATE. a form of expression of life, released 
from the mind, produced by an instrument. this...was ART. in the middle of 
my creation the paper was struck by the pen, lodging itself into the table. 
pouring its blood on the paper. carrying the failed plans of the artist. 
the life it was supposed to
life it was supposed to held. the pen 
was pulled out, leaving its metal tip. the ink stained the artists hands. 
the artist and the creation was fused, for there is no such thing as a 
failed creation. NO such thing as a crude drawing. it was too late. 
i....was created.

the artist was the god of this divining 
universe. l remember. l remember it all.

but what happened to 
the artist? maybe the ink has worn off. maybe he was not god anymore. he 
abandoned us all.maybe he is busy with more complex and marvelous designs. 
and im left here alone in the white lands....lost in the time that was 
supposed to exist.

i....i am a figment of someones 
imagination.

an idea/>___________________________________________________________


experienced one of my outbursts when im drawing. l always do that. the 
burden of the artist is to capture. but my hands are slippery. l was 
inspired by that.

this story reflects the secrets of the mind, 
its mysteries, and the unimaginable possibilities of what it can produce. 
and the depression all artists have. trying to create. maybe OUR artist 
failed to create us. we were gifted with flaws. lost in something that was 
planned to happen. now our artist keeps creating more and more in this 
endless canvas. the universe. who knows what might exist out there. maybe 
more artists...i THINK

who knows..a man can dream.... a man can 
DREAM
 
 
 
 
 

Babymeats , Tuesday, 10th of August 2010 11:28:01 AM

You're brilliant. Very well done.  
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Shimmy Shimmy Lip Gloss Barbie , Wednesday, 11th of August 2010 06:41:35 AM

Wow this is really great and really is a wonderful story and a  
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bit scary about how the person turned out to be you.You have such talent  
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as i have seen many of your work' that you should be a writer of science  
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fiction or scary like king.I know one day will see your name in a book  
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store in a mall near me..EDIT This is much better and it really makes us  
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think' Wow maybe i am just someone is imagination and will i get erased  
soon..BRAVO for this piece it is fabtabulous.  
 
 
 
 
 

Princess , Thursday, 12th of August 2010 07:53:39 AM

well it is (no offense) really boring but you just need to put  
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good stuf in it so keep trying otherwise you're good at writing though  
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