is this story good? ?Ideas of an Idea Part One: The Waiting
/>here l am, wondering about my existence. like the days before. how many
days have passed? l do not know for l can not remember how everything
started. it feels like forever. perhaps forever has passed? why. that
word. that word seems to be the only useful word here. why is the land
white? where did the black marks came from? and what was that metal tower
doing over there? what is its purpose? what is MY purpose? and where did everything come from?what created it? Part Two:Theories /> l remember. l remember. l think l remember. the day when the tower was created. how it struck the lands. how the large gaping hole around it was produced. and beyond that hole was another thing. a brown compound. no. when l was close enough l learned that it was solid. it seems to be similar to the outer grounds. the land beyond the lands. as time passed before me every single moment my mind struggles to chase forgotten thoughts. memories. and sometimes l remember. and sometimes it slipped frommy grasp again. why. Part Three: An Idea />l think. l think. l think all the time. for that is the only useful thing to do. what created me. what created everything. what CREATED. sometimes l look out at the sky. l saw parts of my memoriesrunning around. those little brats. enjoying they're freedom. why can not l do that? why can not l run away? just like my lost memories. my thoughts. thats okay. for l will catch them later. Part Four:Revelations />l caught one. l caught one of my memories. l can not believe it. the feeling of self discovery. it feels like something is being attached to me. the feeling. l like that feeling. it makes me feel good and powerful. l remember. l remember. the tower used to be taller. l remember how it collapsed. how its blood poured down the lands. and the tower locked the lands. it prevented it from moving. pinning it down to the mysterious brown solid. yes. now l remember. the black streaks. they came from the tower. the tower made the lands dirty. and what about me? where did l come from? where did the tower come from? these memories. they are good. l need more. Part Five: The Truth, Perhaps? l caught a bunch of memories now. after struggling for what seems like forever, l hope these memories are worth it. now...i await my pleasant discovery. />a person. l see someone. what is he doing? the tower..i see the tower. when it was in its glorious form! in..it was.. it was in his hands. what was he doing with the tower. why was it small? small enough so that someoe could hold it. more questions came up as they get answered. maybe they will never stop? maybe my quest foris useless for l will never find any ? no. l must not ponder about the others. l must concentrate on this. a cannot afford to lose my memories again. i've gone to far... Part 6: A Purpose as l delve deeper into the depths of my mind..floating in the black void in my mind. the black void was there each time l think of something. there l gain an audience with my memories, viewing what they have in store. the person l saw just now. he seems frustrated. l can feel it. l understand him. i, too, was frustrated. but not anymore, for l have my . that person..what was he doing? why was the tower in his hands? how did it get small. maybe the tower was not small at all? maybe the person was the one who was big. as new questions came up as l answer them, newcome up as im answering them. l see.. it is balanced. the person..seemed unbalanced.. what was he doing? drawing? drawing...on a piece of paper.. a white sheet of paper. perhaps that was the land. and..who is on the piece of paper? as l concentrated harder and harder.... i learned that the person on the paper was me. /> was the person drawing me? was that how l was created? am i...a figment of his imagination? was l in HIS black void? am l in it right now? so many ...so many questions...they just...come up. ideas an theories pouring out of my mind. the mind. is a blessing and a curse. l need to use it to escape it. why was everything balanced? Part Seven: Flaws of Symmetry the person was trying to create. a burden that all artists take. the person was an artist. he was failing. his desired masterpiece was impossible to create. his anger got the better of him. the artist struck his desk with the tower. no..not a tower. an instrument that was used to create. a pen. fueled with its ink, and fused with an artists imagination, it could create anything. by the powerful minds of artists. struggling to produce, to CREATE. a form of expression of life, released from the mind, produced by an instrument. this...was ART. in the middle of my creation the paper was struck by the pen, lodging itself into the table. pouring its blood on the paper. carrying the failed plans of the artist. the life it was supposed to life it was supposed to held. the pen was pulled out, leaving its metal tip. the ink stained the artists hands. the artist and the creation was fused, for there is no such thing as a failed creation. NO such thing as a crude drawing. it was too late. i....was created. the artist was the god of this divining universe. l remember. l remember it all. but what happened to the artist? maybe the ink has worn off. maybe he was not god anymore. he abandoned us all.maybe he is busy with more complex and marvelous designs. and im left here alone in the white lands....lost in the time that was supposed to exist. i....i am a figment of someones imagination. an idea />___________________________________________________________ i experienced one of my outbursts when im drawing. l always do that. the burden of the artist is to capture. but my hands are slippery. l was inspired by that. this story reflects the secrets of the mind, its mysteries, and the unimaginable possibilities of what it can produce. and the depression all artists have. trying to create. maybe OUR artist failed to create us. we were gifted with flaws. lost in something that was planned to happen. now our artist keeps creating more and more in this endless canvas. the universe. who knows what might exist out there. maybe more artists...i THINK who knows..a man can dream.... a man can DREAM
You're brilliant. Very well done.
Wow this is really great and really is a wonderful story and a
bit scary about how the person turned out to be you.You have such talent
as i have seen many of your work' that you should be a writer of science
fiction or scary like king.I know one day will see your name in a book
store in a mall near me..EDIT This is much better and it really makes us
think' Wow maybe i am just someone is imagination and will i get erased
soon..BRAVO for this piece it is fabtabulous.
well it is (no offense) really boring but you just need to put
good stuf in it so keep trying otherwise you're good at writing though
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